CDCS Poets

Monday, October 19, 2009

I’m An Invisible


I am Invisible in a world for the visible,

I am frail in the world for the strong,

I am unfamiliar in the world for the known,

I am hushed in a world for the heard,

I am minute in the world for the immense,

I am unnoticed in a world for the noticed,

Yet, the invisible one can thrash over everyone,

The invisible can overcome the visible.

I, the invisible one in this world, am the visible.




- Karelyn U.

4 Comments:

At 11:14 AM, Blogger CDCStudent said...

hey,
i luv ur poem but i'm really confused mainly bc of the first 2 lines. its vague to the point where i dont really understand.... BUT I LUV THE IDEA THOUGH!!!!! >.<


Ciara M.

 
At 11:20 AM, Blogger CDCStudent said...

Umm... your poem is a bit confusing 2 me. The idea of it is great but ... its in a way that its almost as if it has no purpose...like it just keeps on saying or emphasizing that your invisible....to make it a little better is to not be so vague and add in a little more detail...
BUt I REALLY LIKE YOUR IDEA THOUGH!!
Its great and on the right track!
Keep up the amazing work!! :D


Corina A.

 
At 11:20 AM, Blogger CDCStudent said...

deeeeeeep x|

- mercedes.

 
At 11:11 AM, Blogger CDCStudent said...

i love this poem; mad deep
-Cruz

 

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